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Waiting for a Crack by ~myjarofdirt:iconmyjarofdirt:



She's shattering into a thousand pieces
but no one seems to care.
Or maybe they just haven't noticed.

Maybe this mask that she puts on,
the one that says, "I'm fine!"
hasn't cracked quite yet.

But she's waiting for it to break
because if it doesn't,
she's going to suffocate
under the mask she has created,
to hide herself.

She needs someone to care,
to lift her up.
She can't do this alone.

Under the weight,
she's pleading for salvation.
But no one can hear her scream.
©2008-2009 ~myjarofdirt
:iconmyjarofdirt:

Author's Comments

Not written about anyone, but it does fit for one of my friends now that I think about it. Funny how that works...Uh..yeah. Tell me what you think.

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:iconletshaveafiesta:
Depressing... I like it!
:iconechoed-voice:
I like the first two stanzas especially, closely followed by the last one. But i didn't like the "under the mask she has created, to hide herself", I think it would have worked better with only three lines in each stanza. I would have put something like "she's going to suffocate beneath it" instead. But that's me. Anyways - overall I like it.

I wasn't a huge fan of your "Parts of my Heart" one... but this one gets the thumbs up and a smile-ish (cos if it got an actual smile that would be bad cos it's about a sad subject).

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I'd really, really rather be napping right now.
Comments make me happy - [link] - *cries slightly* Please?
:iconmyjarofdirt:
I hated Parts of my Heart....So I get why you didn't like it :D But lynns wants a record of all the poems I've written, good or bad so...
I might change it...Thanks for the imput :D

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You need to be broken because pain is the only thing that is certain.
:iconrosarycheating:
I agree with Echoed-Voice. You should change it to three lines...

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